Friday, July 6, 2007

Name change and a few more paragraphs

Chapter: 1. The end of chapter 1, in fact.
Word count: 1758
Excerpt length: 249. What? Stop laughing at my uselessness! 249 is better than 248!

Katje Phillips watched her patient’s head loll back on the stretcher. Smiling slightly, she looked up at the paramedic she was sharing the box space with, a twenty-year veteran named Tris. “This has got to be one of the calmest accident victims I’ve come across in a long time.”

Tris rolled his eyes. “And the one with the worst jokes.”

“I’ll take the bad jokes to get the cool-headedness. It’s almost like he’s done this before and isn’t bothering to get worked up about it.” She paused, looking thoughtful. “Did we get his last name?”

“No. Did we get his first, for that matter?”

“Yeah. His first name is ‘Tommy’. That’s all I got out of him before he passed out at the scene.” Keeping the pressure on his leg with one hand, Katje reached for his pocket with the other. “Wonder if he has a wallet...ah!”

“Got it?”

“Yeah.” She pulled out a basic leather wallet and handed it to Tris, who had two free hands to her one. “Open it up and take a look for me.”

He did as requested, then stared down at its contents for a moment. “Well, this might explain it.”

“What might explain what?”

“This. Might explain his demeanor.” He turned the interior of the wallet toward her.

She eyed the gold detective’s shield staring back at her. “He’s a cop.” She looked back down at her patient, searching his face as though it could confirm the fact. “Yeah, that could have something to do with it.”

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